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Great plot, a little editing would be good
Reviewed in Australia on 25 November 2019
The plot was excellent, with small things foreshadowing what came later; very clever. I admit I almost stopped reading when Daisy got to earth because I loathe apocalyptic fiction, but the whole series was full of hope.
However the first book was the best written - did the author fail to get the later ones edited? Things that need attention:
1. Were the sequels posted somewhere chapter by chapter? I ask because we are constantly told what we already know, even things that happened in the previous chapter.
2. Basic physics. The computer and android tech is great, but check out simple Newtonian physics: spaceships with stalled engines don't float in space; they keep going at the same speed and direction. Someone going out an airlock will get further away from the ship at the speed they left at, but if the ship's not accelerating, they'll keep pace with it.
3. Epithets. Enough already with the epithets! Seriously, we don't have to be constantly told that an AI is brilliant, an arm made of nanites etc etc. Give out intelligence some respect. Plus, names are good. There's no confusion or disconnect with names instead of things like 'her nanite-armed sister'.
4. Said phobia - the unnecessary and irritating avoidance of the innocent and useful little word 'said'. 'Said' is almost invisible; alternatives are distracting and often very irritating.
5. What did Daisy (and Sara) look like? We get descriptions of other people, but come on, even the basics would have been good. I ended up imagining Daisy as black (and she rocked that way).