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All hype but little here to sweep you into this world
31 March 2019
Fan of the Gin Blanco series up until a few books ago - too repetitive and samey for me these days. But hey, I trust the author so thought why not give this new series a go... hmmm.
Boy was this underwhelming. To the publisher - I realise Jennifer is a well known author but you seriously couldn't point out a dozen ways she could have improved this book? What, too scared to upset your money spinner? Shame on you, no newbie author would have been able to get this florid, wordy mess published in the current state.
World building should be effortless and draw the reader in. Not overly descriptive for the sheer hell of it.
Main character - our 28 yr old character was way too YA. Depth. Layers. Hey, and just to keep her relatable give her some flaws. This whole Mary-Sue act was numbing.
Secondary characters should be more than just good or bad. Again, bring on the depth.
And the entire plot should not be spelled out in the blurb because.... well isn't it obvious? You lose all sense of suspense as the story is spoon-fed to you. And whilst we are on the plot, let's give it some twists, some turns. This tale plodded on predictably from one chapter to the next, no surprises, no tension... nothing for the reader to invest in. And good God, spend a little longer on the romance. No one does hate/anger/coolness then suddenly wants someone on their back. There has to be interactions, small moments that build, a connection.
And for the love of God - the betrayal? Oh boo-hoo, your cousin was bitchy, shut a door in your face and had everyone else be mean to you. Really? That's your premise for the well deep cold rage? OMG, get over your immature self. This was a pathetic basis for Evie's rage. And an obvious problem for the setting pacing of the so called plot.
This is all writing 101 - so why, dear Publisher, did you not push back on this author and demand more? I suspect money is your only goal. Well, I'm tapping out of this series now.