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The Summoned Ones: Book 1 Flight to Bericea (1) Paperback – 29 February 2020
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- Publisher : Bresford Ridge Publishing (29 February 2020)
- Language : English
- Paperback : 336 pages
- ISBN-10 : 0997905905
- ISBN-13 : 978-0997905908
- Dimensions : 13.34 x 1.78 x 20.32 cm
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After I got involved in the story and the fantasy element kicked in, I started to notice a few flaws in the writing. Not enough to say the writing was bad, or the story suffered enough to dislike it. Just little things I’ve picked up on over time being a writer for online learning and an avid reader.
The first was the way the story was written, the technical writing element. I found myself needing to read a sentence multiple times to understand what it was meant to say because it wasn’t succinct. I’m not saying I’m any better, but it’s something that takes practice, distance and often an editor or second set of eyes to pick up and fine tune.
The second was the distribution of the story, how long we focused on a group of characters. This might be a personal feeling, but it felt like each chapter spent on a group of characters should have been shorter, with more changes between the groups. That way you don’t get so involved in one group you forget about the rest and what’s happened to them.
With shorter chapters and more frequent changes between the groups, I think I would’ve spent less time trying to remember what had happened and more time being actively involved in the story. By actively involved I mean me wondering what was happening with the others and wanting to read more.
By the end I still wanted more. I still want to know what happens. I just think improvements in those areas could have made it even more engaging for me.