(This is a review for the Legend and Myth book which was split into two novels)
I received a free copy of this book via Booksprout and am voluntarily leaving a review.
Legend and Myth is a "Chosen One" story about a girl named Ava who is perfect and everyone loves her and conflict doesn't exist between her and the Kyra - Seven protectors of winged immortal and perfect creatures known as Farrion. Ava has the Enarie light, a beacon of light in times of darkness.
The story revolves around her discovery of said power and the Kyra, along with a boy named Beladon adventuring through the Land of Men to get Ava to safety while being chased by the bad guys, Broge and his war dogs who do the bidding of Norak - a bad guy who is darkness and other fantasy cliches.
The writing itself starts of bad, whoever did the editing needs to do a better job because it was disjointed and nonsensical. For example:
"The presence of this wolf was like no other. He was big! And his eyes were unusual wolf eyes." - A wolf wouldn't have any other eyes.
"To the immortal magic that understood it, unlike the wolf, this silence held an eerie sound." - Silence can't have a sound.
"“The eyes were blue, a deep greying blue that looked like the coldest frost of winter.”
Were they blue or deep greying blue? Could probably just skip the "blue" part and say they were a deep grey blue instead.
Another example is when Lae'Lora died, it was mentioned the other dragons were approaching the dead body and then 2 sentences later it was repeated about approaching the body.
These are some examples I noted. There are others but it is mostly just an editing thing. I understand what Broadby was trying to get across for the most part.
There are some notable spelling mistakes.
Another issue I take with it is that the characters all tend to have to speak like Yoda and a lot of exclamation marks in what seem to be standard conversations.
The book itself is probably 100 pages too long. There are far too many repeated points, especially about how perfect Ava is or how perfect the Farrions are as warriors. There is no conflict between characters and any issues are resolved 2 pages later. It doesn't lead to much suspense or desire to continue reading.
The writing improves as the story goes on but, as mentioned above, it needs a good editor to go through it and remove the redundant and repeated statements that occur throughout the book.
I think the book is a decent debut that is rough around the edges but I think it would improve with better editing and removing 100 pages and just tighten up the interactions between characters to create a bit more conflict.
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- ASIN : B08GQ7BHF9
- Publisher : A.D. Broadby (25 August 2020)
- Language : English
- File size : 2542 KB
- Simultaneous device usage : Unlimited
- Text-to-Speech : Enabled
- Screen Reader : Supported
- Enhanced typesetting : Enabled
- X-Ray : Not Enabled
- Word Wise : Enabled
- Print length : 334 pages
- Page numbers source ISBN : 0648520358
- Best Sellers Rank: 637,290 in Kindle Store (See Top 100 in Kindle Store)
- Customer Reviews:
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