Endangered (Daughter of Hades Book 1) Kindle Edition

So glad that I got this off of Christopher's wall <3 so good, love the lore

Endangered is the story of Chrys, daughter of Hades. She longs to leave the underworld and explore. She cannot understand why her father refuses to let her. When she decides to sneak out, she finds more danger than she ever imagined. Can she find her way back home? Or will her actions cause a war between the gods?

**I received a copy of this book free from NetGalley in exchange for an honest review**

Ok. Good story. Liked the plot. Interesting and well thought out.
On the other hand, the author thanks her editor at the end of her book, so there's proof that it has been edited. And still the mistakes. Honestly, if the mistakes were fixed, this might have been a four to four and a half stars (but no half stars allowed, right?). The plot saved it for me. I think this book could be very popular, but someone needs to reread this book and really fix the proofreading errors. If I can catch them in s single read, then someone else should.
Now for the actual story: Chrys is the daughter of Hades and Persephone. Hades isn't supposed to be able to bear children, as he is the God of Death and all...but somehow, it happened, and she's been stuck in the Underworld, hiding from Zeus. If he finds out she exists, then she's toast. But Persephone hates the Underworld, and she says in the heat of the moment that she wishes she could stay on Earth because there's nothing to keep her down below. Ouch. If my mother said something like that in front of me, I would probably feel pretty rejected, too. So she takes her two best friends, A.J. and Huntley up to Earth to see what it's like...if only for a few days. If Zeus finds out, there will be hell to pay. Get it? Hell to pay...anyway...
So that's the plot for you. Nice, different. Enough to keep you reading. So.id effort on the author's part to make it interesting. Some of the POV switches between Huntley (the boy) and Chrys (daughter of Hades) seem to sound the same at times...but it's a good work in progress. Someone just needs to come along and polish it up, and it could be very successful as a series. As it stands, it needs some work. Technical work, mainly. But other than that, an entertaining read, and I would be willing to read the next one in the series just to know what happens. If left off on a pretty compelling cliffhanger....
★★★☆☆. I'd add a half if it was possible.

***Disclaimer: I received a copy in exchange for a review.***

The First Five Words/Intro: “Hello and welcome to the Underworld. My name is Chrys, and I am the daughter of Hades. May I take your coat?” Sets the tone for the story but didn’t inspire much confidence. For a goddess who’s never set foot out of the Underworld she’s got a definitively modern style to her. If she’s been alive for so many thousands of years- and was personally mentored by Shakespeare himself- why does she only have contemporary references yet remain so clueless about things?

Style: The POV switches between Chrys and Huntley; an interesting tactic that allows you to see the story from different perspectives. The overall tone is pretty consistent yet uneven. Again, this is the centuries-old daughter of a god and a goddess in her own right, yet she’s only matured physically/emotionally to a high school level? I’d like to think there’s a reason for this, especially as every other godly being encountered is clearly an adult- aside from her own friends, conveniently- but we’re not given one.

Characters: Chrys is interesting enough but seems stuck in a permanent state of wangst. She can’t seem to make up her mind about much of anything other than being self-absorbed Ex: “My father was one of the most important people in my life, if the not the most important…” Really? You’re not sure? You know all of four people and you can’t tell where your own father ranks among them? Smooth. For a main character she doesn’t have much of an arc or growth through the story.

Huntley is an ok dude with some depth and develops more than Chrys does. He’s never much examined his circumstances and always treaded carefully, aware of how fragile his status is, but begins piecing things together and wondering about his place as a mortal amongst gods.

AJ or Agenor, has a potentially interesting backstory as how a son of Poseidon ended up in the Underworld, but we never learn it. This Agenor seems like he was based off the one from the Wrath of the Titans movie than actual mythology. You know he’s up to something; but what it is and why isn’t what you’d expect.

Story & Conflict: When we finally get to it, it’s a little disappointing. Without going into spoilers a lot of trouble could’ve been avoided if Hades had done what he should’ve all along and only offered to after everything hits the fan: train Chrys properly. The whole story centers around keeping Chrys under wraps and unknown to the rest of the gods, yet Hades never bothers to develop her powers even though he knows what she’s capable of and she’s constantly frightened of what could happen should she lose control. But no one ever teaches her.

Right when things were getting kinda interesting, the author pulls out the same old MarySue/Chosen One card: Chrys is the one from the prophecy with the power to destroy the gods, etc, blahblahblah.

I was ready to stop reading right there.

I don’t understand why *every* PNR/UF story- especially YA- want to go down this road. What’s the point? Where’s the struggle and conflict if the character is all-powerful right from the jump? Why can’t they just discover (not all of) their abilities, work around their limitations and face challenges with/against their peers? Ultimate beings are ultimately pretty damn dull and this doesn’t leave much room for improvement in the sequels: who can stand up to an all-powerful entity who’s fated to win? Why would anyone even try?

Proficiency: book needed proofreading. Simple as that.

Dialogue: Everyone speaks in a contemporary style, fitting enough for a modern day setting. But again, you’d think Chrys- and everyone else who resides in the Underworld- would have more formal & archaic speech patterns as they never leave it and have limited exposure to the world.

Narrative/Pacing: a pretty even keel for the most part. The bulk of the story is filled with the dynamics of the relationship between Chrys & Huntley and how they relate to everyone else. It’s not bad, just could’ve used more punch, or maybe a little something from Hades’ own POV.

Overall, there’s a story buried in here and has the potential to be a good one. It just needs to be treated as what it claims to be: a goddess who shouldn’t exist coming into her own to face those who want to destroy her, instead of a whiny teenaged girl whose tantrums could destroy the world and the father who never trained her not to. Because with the latter everyone else has a good point in wanting to stop her.