As always a pacy well- written thriller with excellent character development. I looked for a way to contact the author but I don't use FB or Twitter so, Angela, l hope you read this at some point.
I realise you may have little control over what the editors do to mangle your grammar - and I do know they need to consider the US market - but I write this because of my frustration at seeing so many good authors' work being homogenised by publishing industry fools.
The relative pronoun "that", increasingly used to refer to people instead of "who", is being forced beyond even it's limited usage in common speech into some sort of publishing standard by editors; editors who are ignorant of what readers expect from the better writers, of which you are clearly one. I know this because I can see where they missed some of your original sentences and left them intact.
Please stand up to the dumbing-down pressures of the industry for the sake of your readers. Who, whom, which and whose: relative as well as interrogative pronouns - "that" relates to inanimate objects, not people.
An example from this book: "You forget that I’m the only person that truly knows you". Not only is the second "that" wrong as common usage, it's also downright ugly, clumsy and jarring; in other words - plain damn bad writing.
I'm not normally a prescriptive grammar hound, but in this case it's the the publishing industry forcing a rule which is out of step with descriptive grammar - especially that used by the majority of readers likely to buy your books in the first place; those of us for whom good writing stands out among the "paint by numbers" flood of detective fiction now available online.
I hope this critique is taken in the encouraging spirit with which it is sent.
- Format: Kindle Edition
- File Size: 2279 KB
- Print Length: 388 pages
- Publisher: Bookouture (4 November 2016)
- Sold by: Amazon Australia Services, Inc.
- Language: English
- ASIN: B01LBQMA5Y
- Text-to-Speech: Enabled
- Word Wise: Enabled
- Customer Reviews: 2,105 customer ratings
- Amazon Bestsellers Rank: #9,972 Paid in Kindle Store (See Top 100 Paid in Kindle Store)